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Deanna has written a story for the literary art magazine. Her teacher suggested she add relevant descriptive details and sensory language to better capture the action of the story. Read the story and the directions that follow.
I turned the key in the ignition and started the tractor. Dad sat behind me, telling me what to do. This was the first time I would drive the tractor myself. I was nervous; my heart beat like the fluttering of bird’s wings against a steel cage. "Now, put it into gear and slowly let off the brake," my father yelled over the loud rattling of the old engine. I did as I was told. The large tractor moved forward, bouncing and bumping over the ground like a rickety carnival ride.
We came to the gates that opened up to the large pasture where we kept our horses. The long grass swayed in the wind like waves on the surface of an ocean. "All right, now," Dad said, "you have to get off the tractor and open up the gates." I knew this was the hardest part of this job: trying to keep the horses from running through the gates while I opened them and drove the tractor through. I could see Equinox, a horse my dad had bought. He was standing close to the gate. I worried he’d get out when I opened the gate. Equinox made angry horse sounds when he saw me coming.
I looked back at my father uncertainly. "Throw a couple rocks his way," he said matter-of-factly. "He’ll move." I picked up a handful of rocks and tossed them lightly. I didn’t want to hurt the creature, but scare it. Before the rocks reached him, Equinox ran like lightning through the open gate over a softly rolling hill and disappeared.
Which of the following examples provides the strongest option to strengthen the narrative strategies in the underlined text by inserting descriptive details and sensory language?